托福写作：多点真诚少用"套路"

托福写作：多点真诚少用"套路"

　　很多考生在备考的时候，比较依赖一些套句，这种备考方式可能是大家以前在准备一些国内考试时养成的习惯。学生在习惯了一个“套路”后，背一些观念和表达，然后用到的套句里。这种方法看似简单不用动脑，但它有两个缺点：

　　一是，一些套句很多考生都在使用，而考官看得太多之后，会认为某些过度依赖套句或模板的考生可能不具备独立写作的能力。特别是当很多同学文章里具体内容很少的时候，这些套句会显得格外扎眼，会导致考官给你比较低的分数。

　　二是，套句比较生硬，学生为了使用看似“高级”的套句扩充字数而生搬硬套，导致文不对题，可能直接会影响考生在任务回应(Address Task Efficiently)方面的成绩。

　　那么怎么减少对套句依赖呢?我们需要多想想前因后果。

　　第一，我们可以用原因状语从句，也就是since, because, as等连词引导的从句

　　例如： There is no denying that young adults who do not receive tertiary education may find it difficult to survive in the increasingly competitive job market.

　　这个句子用了There is no denying that 的套句，如果去掉后，我们可以用什么替代呢?

　　我们可以思考原因，为什么没接受高等教育的人很难在竞争激烈的工作市场中生存，可能是因为大多数公司喜欢雇佣高学历的人或者说高学历在社会上非常重要。

　　这句话我们可以改成：Young adults who do not receive tertiary education may find it difficult to survive in the increasingly competitive job market because the majority of companies tend to hire job applicants who hold bachelor degree or even master degree.

　　或者是：As academic qualification is highly valued in the modern society, young adults who do not receive tertiary education may find it difficult to survive in the increasingly competitive job market.

　　再举个栗子：It should also be noted that keeping regular exercise is of great important for young people.

　　这个句子用了It should also be noted that 的套句，如果去掉后，我们可以用什么替代呢?

　　我们可以思考原因，经常锻炼为什么对年轻人有好处呢?通过运动，我们可以变得更健康，并且有可能减少得肥胖症、糖尿病等疾病的可能;我们也通过一些体育运动比如慢跑、打羽毛球等释放压力，变得更快乐，等等。

　　这句话可以改成：Keeping regular exercise is of great important for young people since we can improve physical fitness and we are less likely to suffer from health problems such as obesity or diabetes.

　　或者是：Keeping regular exercise is of great important for young people due to the fact that sports activities such as jogging or playing badminton enable us to release stress.

　　第二，多思考结果。可以使用结果状语从句，或者使用其他引导结果的句子结构也是一个不错的办法。

　　栗子1：The idea lies in the fact that a considerable number of young people try to learn English rather than study their mother tongue.

　　如果不使用the idea lies in the fact that的套句，我们想一想年轻人学习英语而不是母语这个现象的结果。例如，这个行为可能会导致一些少数语言的消失、同时文化多样性也受到影响。使用结果状语从句，句子可以改为：

　　A considerable number of young people try to learn English rather than study their mother tongue so minority languages may die out and cultural diversity is affected adversely.

　　栗子2：It is worth mentioning that young people are obsessed with electronic devices with up-to-date features.

　　这个句子也使用了套句，如果去掉后，我们除了可以思考原因(年轻人为什么痴迷于购买最新的电子产品)之外，还可以说年轻人大量购买电子产品所产生的结果。例如，过度消费可能会给他们的家庭造成经济负担。

　　使用非限定性定语从句表示结果：

　　Young people are obsessed with electronic devices with up-to-date features, which may impose a financial burden on their families.