2016雅思写作范文：健康类（3）_第2页

　　【范文赏析】：

　　{首段}：背景介绍 + 争议焦点 + 作家立场

　　Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. However, people have been pondering, for many years, the significance of maintaining personal health without reaching any definite consensus. A popular belief is that personal health only serves the good of the community. As I see it，optimizing personal health could not only benefit the society，but importantly，conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity.

　　【解析】：

　　1. Health is to every individual what perfume is to flowers. 健康对于每个人，如同花香对于花朵。

　　2. a popular belief is that ……一种流行的观点就是……

　　3. optimizing personal health v 完善个人健康

　　4. conduce to individual life, family harmony and career prosperity v有助于个人生活，家庭和睦，事业辉煌

　　{二段}：为何保持健康是尽到了社会责任

　　Indeed, I have to concede that keeping fit could be of great benefits for a nation and therefore be deemed as the personal obligation to the community. In other words, As for the country，the increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. Also, health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. It is conceivable that the increase of healthy social citizens can help create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further prosperity of a nation.

　　【解析】：

　　1. could be of great benefits for a nation v对于国家有利好

　　2. The increased proportion of wholesome citizens could greatly diminish the consumption in terms of the public medical treatment. 健康公民的增加会减少社会公共医疗的消耗。

　　3. Health indicates good mentality and vigorous physique. 健康意味着健良好的心态和充沛的体能。

　　4. create immense social value and thus inject new vitality into the further development of a nation v 创造巨大的价值，为国家的发展注入新鲜活力。

　　{三段}：为何保持健康对于个人有利好

　　Nevertheless，every individual could become the beneficiary of keeping fit too. First, a man with sound physique and mentality succeed better at work，respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. Secondly, health could, to a large extent, enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. For example, many entrepreneurs or super stars usually suffer from various health-related problems due to excessive workload and huge mental pressure. It is conceivable that one’s poor health condition will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members. Last, remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study.

　　【解析】：

　　1. Every individual could become the beneficiary of　……　人人都可以成为……的受益者

　　2. A man with sound physique and mentality people succeed better at work，respond better to stress, suffer less depressive mood and achieve more personal goals. 身心健康者工作更有成效，积极应对压力，较少沮丧，可以实现更多个人目标。

　　3. …… enable one to brave career enthusiastically and harmonize family optimistically. …… 使人精力充沛地应对事业的挑战，以及乐观地实现家庭的和谐。

　　4. …… will inevitably bring a sea of agonies to the family members …… 不可避免地给健康带来巨大的痛苦

　　5. Remaining health enables one to regenerate energy, refresh mind and thus improve the efficiency of work and study. 保持健康使人恢复体能，清醒头脑，因此，提高工作和学习的效率。

　　尾段：再次亮明观点：

　　In closing, I re-affirm my conviction that keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. Therefore, embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us.

　　【解析】：

　　1. Keeping fit is not only related to social responsibility but also links to personal happiness, which is more significant. 保持健康，不仅仅是和社会责任相关，同时，于个人幸福相关，而后者，意义更加重要。

　　2. Embarking on a healthier lifestyle should a lifelong habit for every one of us. 培养健康的生活方式应该每个人应该坚持的终生的习惯。