2011年6月英语四级作文外教版范文和评析 (沪江版)

Part I Writing

Online shopping has been a boon to many industries and companies looking to expand their markets. Also, it’s convenient for shoppers who are too busy to leave the house. However, in some cases nothing can replace a true face to face shopping experience.
Internet shopping is convenient for the mothers who spend all day doing house chores and for the fathers who work a full-time job. On the other hand, there are limits to shopping online, for example: guessing the correct size of clothing on a computer screen can be very frustrating.
For the busy mother and father, online shopping is a very useful and convenient tool. But, there are instances, like clothes shopping, where nothing beats the real thing.

点评：wｗw.ExamＷ.CoM
作者在第一段描述了网购作为一种时尚给大家的生活带来了便利，然后话锋一转，说网购仍然取代不了面对面的购物交流。
第二段主要还是从正反两方面分析了网购的优势和不足，以此描述大家对网购的不同反应。
第三段作者表明了自己的观点，对网购的便利和不足之处都做了描述。
综合来讲，本篇文章观点明确，结构清晰，语言表达地道，有不少闪光词汇，但是，内容深度上来讲还有些欠缺，另外，最后一部分表达个人观点，和第二段稍有重复。考生需要注意观点的清晰，不宜模棱两可。